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Since I spend a lot of my time writing, and I have a series of dark-fantasy books under my belt, I've become inspired to attempt to write a piece of Starmade Fiction. It's set in a personal universe. It is set in a fictional galaxy within starmade. It follows the basic idea of starmade, but with a lot more people, such as deployable troops, massive "zones", and it utilizes my vision of the new 5-by-5 weapon system. Planets are spherical and ships arent quite as blocky. But feel free to envision them as built in starmade. I will use some existing factions. I will base their leaders off of the IRL leaders, but they will not be insertions of them. I will exxagerate some points, such as the DFN's "we take pretty much anyone" and other points for other factions. Anything I say here isn't actual said by me, but our characters, so this story remains politically free in every circumstance. And it focuses around our hero, Andrew Jefferson, a civilian who lived on the planet Pragni VI, until....
Prologue - Pragni VI
Fire rained from the sky. Vaygr ships tore through the atmosphere, sowing great seeds of war all around the land. My mother was rushing to the nearest shelter, with me in tow. I had been visiting her after my graduation from the Pragni University for the Gifted, a prestigious academy designed to train the best of the best. I looked back, and saw a massive explosion as the great twisted figure of a massive Vaygr Shriek Siege Bomber let loose it's devastating payload. It dug straight into the ground at the foot of its target, and soon the very ground began to rumble. My mother fell as we both stared back in awe, and the very earth itself tore apart around my home city of Cadai, as the subterranean bombs of the Shriek Siege Bomber did their work.
Looks like I wasn't going to any Alumni parties after all.
I lived in, the Cadai System, which only seemed more brutally ironic now, being named after a city that just ceased to exist. The Cadai System was in a state of constant battle between the Debrisian military and the iron-handed Vaygr. But until now, the combat had always been waged far outside atmospheric levels, and our 8 planets protected by massive shielding arrays. Sadly, it seemed the Vaygr had gotten enough of the Debrisians shit, and decided to show the considerably more massive DFN that size wasn't everything. They sent in one of their feared Terror Fleets, and began to work on purging the system.
As much as that moment made me despise the Vaygr, I knew they weren't evil. They were just heavy-handed, powerful, and believed that an iron will and an unbreakable spine superceded the concept of democracy and acceptance that the DFN preffered. At times, they could be assholes, especially if anyone decided to talk against them (which the DFN did on a disturbingly common basis), but by damn we're they good at what they did.
I shuffled to my feet, and grabbed my mom by the shoulders. I could see the look in her shaking eyes, the look of fear and sadness, but now was no time to simply daddle. I pulled her to her feet and forced her to move forward. Her movements were reluctant at first, while her ever so loving mind failed to comprehend the strains of war, but the explosion of a Vaygr missile no more than eighty yards away put some more pep into her step. Soon, we were again at full sprint, the shelter door in sight. We were the last to enter it, as the number counter on the door recorded our entry, reaching the 500 mark as I passed through behind our mother. The doors slammed shut, and the moment those doors shut, I was covered in disturbing silence, with only light *thumps* of massive bombs getting through the thick layers of the bunker.
Forty minutes later, still no-one had spoken a word. I had been holding my mother, her tiny body shivering in fear. For the last five minutes, there had been no sound of a bomb. And then, suddenly, piercing the silence, a transciever turned on, and speakers opened up. It was the voice of a Vaygr Terror Commander, deep and rusty. "All citizens, we have routed the DFN from your airspace. Cadia was merely a technical center of the DFN, and has been seen to not have enough resources to be considered valuable."
That's not right... I thought to myself, We had learned in the University that only Pragni VI lacked resources, and planets I-V and VII-VIII were some of the richest in this part of the galaxy.
"After the next hour, we will begin fully Purging your planets. After an hour and a half, every planet in the Cadia system will be rendered entirely inhospitable. You have until then to flee. All weapon systems have been disabled. We allowed the DFN to land and abandon a multitude of civilian escort craft across the system. Only the grace of the Vaygr Emperor has given you this. The timer starts now."
"Why would the Vaygr even keep maniacs like that! They have no respect for human life!" A man shouted.
"Because they work, that's why." I mumbled to myself, "They have a record for winning.". I pulled my mother away from the door, to the back of the crowd. The array of bolts began to unlock themselves.
She reached up and held me close, "Andrew, why did you take me away from the door?"
"It will be chaos when it opens. I didn't want you to be trampled."
The locks opened, and the door swung open. Sure enough, the other four-hundred and ninety-eight people in the shelter stormed out seeking those craft like rumbling maniacs. But could I blame them? They didn't understand how the system worked. Pradni was a business planet, and outside of the University, was legendary for having rash, but effective, business men, salesmen, and economic mongrels. But without their fancy ships and nice houses, they had no idea what to do.
I took my mother and brought her outside. Nothing could have prepared me, or her, for the damage that had been done.
END OF PROLOGUE
Since I spend a lot of my time writing, and I have a series of dark-fantasy books under my belt, I've become inspired to attempt to write a piece of Starmade Fiction. It's set in a personal universe. It is set in a fictional galaxy within starmade. It follows the basic idea of starmade, but with a lot more people, such as deployable troops, massive "zones", and it utilizes my vision of the new 5-by-5 weapon system. Planets are spherical and ships arent quite as blocky. But feel free to envision them as built in starmade. I will use some existing factions. I will base their leaders off of the IRL leaders, but they will not be insertions of them. I will exxagerate some points, such as the DFN's "we take pretty much anyone" and other points for other factions. Anything I say here isn't actual said by me, but our characters, so this story remains politically free in every circumstance. And it focuses around our hero, Andrew Jefferson, a civilian who lived on the planet Pragni VI, until....
Prologue - Pragni VI
Fire rained from the sky. Vaygr ships tore through the atmosphere, sowing great seeds of war all around the land. My mother was rushing to the nearest shelter, with me in tow. I had been visiting her after my graduation from the Pragni University for the Gifted, a prestigious academy designed to train the best of the best. I looked back, and saw a massive explosion as the great twisted figure of a massive Vaygr Shriek Siege Bomber let loose it's devastating payload. It dug straight into the ground at the foot of its target, and soon the very ground began to rumble. My mother fell as we both stared back in awe, and the very earth itself tore apart around my home city of Cadai, as the subterranean bombs of the Shriek Siege Bomber did their work.
Looks like I wasn't going to any Alumni parties after all.
I lived in, the Cadai System, which only seemed more brutally ironic now, being named after a city that just ceased to exist. The Cadai System was in a state of constant battle between the Debrisian military and the iron-handed Vaygr. But until now, the combat had always been waged far outside atmospheric levels, and our 8 planets protected by massive shielding arrays. Sadly, it seemed the Vaygr had gotten enough of the Debrisians shit, and decided to show the considerably more massive DFN that size wasn't everything. They sent in one of their feared Terror Fleets, and began to work on purging the system.
As much as that moment made me despise the Vaygr, I knew they weren't evil. They were just heavy-handed, powerful, and believed that an iron will and an unbreakable spine superceded the concept of democracy and acceptance that the DFN preffered. At times, they could be assholes, especially if anyone decided to talk against them (which the DFN did on a disturbingly common basis), but by damn we're they good at what they did.
I shuffled to my feet, and grabbed my mom by the shoulders. I could see the look in her shaking eyes, the look of fear and sadness, but now was no time to simply daddle. I pulled her to her feet and forced her to move forward. Her movements were reluctant at first, while her ever so loving mind failed to comprehend the strains of war, but the explosion of a Vaygr missile no more than eighty yards away put some more pep into her step. Soon, we were again at full sprint, the shelter door in sight. We were the last to enter it, as the number counter on the door recorded our entry, reaching the 500 mark as I passed through behind our mother. The doors slammed shut, and the moment those doors shut, I was covered in disturbing silence, with only light *thumps* of massive bombs getting through the thick layers of the bunker.
Forty minutes later, still no-one had spoken a word. I had been holding my mother, her tiny body shivering in fear. For the last five minutes, there had been no sound of a bomb. And then, suddenly, piercing the silence, a transciever turned on, and speakers opened up. It was the voice of a Vaygr Terror Commander, deep and rusty. "All citizens, we have routed the DFN from your airspace. Cadia was merely a technical center of the DFN, and has been seen to not have enough resources to be considered valuable."
That's not right... I thought to myself, We had learned in the University that only Pragni VI lacked resources, and planets I-V and VII-VIII were some of the richest in this part of the galaxy.
"After the next hour, we will begin fully Purging your planets. After an hour and a half, every planet in the Cadia system will be rendered entirely inhospitable. You have until then to flee. All weapon systems have been disabled. We allowed the DFN to land and abandon a multitude of civilian escort craft across the system. Only the grace of the Vaygr Emperor has given you this. The timer starts now."
"Why would the Vaygr even keep maniacs like that! They have no respect for human life!" A man shouted.
"Because they work, that's why." I mumbled to myself, "They have a record for winning.". I pulled my mother away from the door, to the back of the crowd. The array of bolts began to unlock themselves.
She reached up and held me close, "Andrew, why did you take me away from the door?"
"It will be chaos when it opens. I didn't want you to be trampled."
The locks opened, and the door swung open. Sure enough, the other four-hundred and ninety-eight people in the shelter stormed out seeking those craft like rumbling maniacs. But could I blame them? They didn't understand how the system worked. Pradni was a business planet, and outside of the University, was legendary for having rash, but effective, business men, salesmen, and economic mongrels. But without their fancy ships and nice houses, they had no idea what to do.
I took my mother and brought her outside. Nothing could have prepared me, or her, for the damage that had been done.
END OF PROLOGUE